Snewf All American 63368 Posts user info edit post |
Rodents rustle-scuffle and play my neighbors jazz snare. Singing, far-off cries of cargo trains and The Atlantic's distant murmur.
Wind whistling Dixie. Play the cotton dance while Crickets fiddle in tobacco barns for bullfrog croaks to The syncopated spatter of tin-roof rain.
A mountain midnight's shuddering branch Speaks silently, with fiery tongues, Of warmth and gray smoke; snap crack.
House key strides carry hurried jingles, While rubber mutters on moist pavement. Voltage hums and ripples in mid-day humid air.
A broken dollar silver-copper-tinkle Heard over motorcar combustion growl. Inhale, exhale softly, softly, sing.
Notes in the honeysuckle lull. Moments unobserved, almost unheard. 10/12/2008 11:51:43 PM |
wawebste All American 19599 Posts user info edit post |
ntlb 10/12/2008 11:54:00 PM |
Snewf All American 63368 Posts user info edit post |
yeah my poem languished for what was literally MINUTES before finally being recognized
jackass 10/12/2008 11:54:57 PM |
wawebste All American 19599 Posts user info edit post |
I was so lost in its....umm...beauty, it took me a while to recognize it. 10/12/2008 11:56:08 PM |
kiljadn All American 44690 Posts user info edit post |
ntlb 10/12/2008 11:56:22 PM |
pilgrimshoes Suspended 63151 Posts user info edit post |
btt 10/12/2008 11:57:09 PM |
chembob Yankee Cowboy 27011 Posts user info edit post |
10/10 10/12/2008 11:58:04 PM |
Spontaneous All American 27372 Posts user info edit post |
Nothing teaches Leesville bastards 10/12/2008 11:58:28 PM |
spöokyjon ℵ 18617 Posts user info edit post |
I consider myself somewhat cultured, but poetry, in general, seems to confer upon itself an undeserved amount of importance and is, therefore, teh lame. 10/12/2008 11:58:41 PM |
Snewf All American 63368 Posts user info edit post |
anyone who takes a minute and a half to read a poem didn't read at all they only looked
I'm not saying I'm a great poet or even a good one
but you definitely didn't give it a fair shake 10/12/2008 11:58:43 PM |
wawebste All American 19599 Posts user info edit post |
Quote : | "anyone who takes a minute and a half to read a poem didn't read at all" |
So by reading the poem...we're not reading it...you my friend, just divided by zero.
10/13/2008 12:00:58 AM |
Snewf All American 63368 Posts user info edit post |
have you taken a class on reading poetry? there's a technique to it
I'm not going to argue anymore though
it is what it is and you don't have to love it 10/13/2008 12:02:39 AM |
wawebste All American 19599 Posts user info edit post |
Who said I didn't love it...because I LOVED it.... and 10/13/2008 12:04:33 AM |
ReceiveDeath INEED2 GET HIRITENOW 70284 Posts user info edit post |
ntlb 10/13/2008 12:07:15 AM |
Skack All American 31140 Posts user info edit post |
You take the good You take the bad You take them both And then you have The facts of life The facts of life 10/13/2008 12:07:41 AM |
Snewf All American 63368 Posts user info edit post |
alright cool
I wrote this one in Raleigh several years ago when I was going to State 10/13/2008 12:08:44 AM |
Fareako Shitter Pilot 10238 Posts user info edit post |
Calculating the End (Song 5)
Oppression in spirit Symbolic for the masses In their hidden meaning Destructive forces afoot
Instructing a new age Defying the old rites Enslaving the believers Caressing their beliefs
Daylight fades Leaving cold calculations The masses settle Caught between the lies Of their pretentious leaders
The leaderless armies fade Into promises of martyrdom
Nothing sacred is held Loss is all they march for
Only those who live for themselves remain Awaiting the futile ending Only to have it never come Order was never ours to begin with Natures forces deprecate higher thought And destroy it without emotion Humanity ends in ruin The faith forgotten
Turmoil sets in As the new age dawns The façade cracks
Beyond the point of no return The light of the past dims Sweet misery has beckoned
Death Receiving Coma-tose
Cold and calculating 10/13/2008 12:14:12 AM |
raiden All American 10505 Posts user info edit post |
10/14/2008 3:15:06 AM |